Mudcat Café message #3558680 The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #152141   Message #3558680
Posted By: GUEST,CS
13-Sep-13 - 01:56 PM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
Like the others who have expressed an opinion, I prefer the original line. The OPs' alternate version feels 'clunky' as someone else commented. So far as making a song scan more nicely *for me* to sing, I will alter lines. I will also alter dialect words that feel unnatural to me. But only minimally.