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Thread #152141   Message #3558238
Posted By: Joe_F
11-Sep-13 - 07:57 PM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
I forgot to mention: "If you're a corporate titanic" is also incoherent. Faced with a choice between "If you're a corporation titanic", which would have spoiled the meter, & "If you're a corporate titan", which would have spoiled both that & the rhyme, Paxton gave us a nonsensical mixture, rather than run away to "If your business is titanic" or the like. There are contexts in which that sort of illogic is negligible, but in a song that has pretentions to wit it is embarrassing.