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Thread #152141   Message #3557481
Posted By: GUEST,Tunesmith
09-Sep-13 - 12:53 PM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
Ah, Richard Thompson! Now, where do we start!
"Don't Renege on our love"!
Now that sounds so artificial!
Could you ever imagine a man saying to his wife "don't renege on our love?"
I don't know anyone who would use the word renege in that situation.
But, I know exactly how Richard got there!
He looked at " don't give up on our love" . No, that won't do, it's been used before!
Then, he tried, "Don't go back on our love".
No, No! That's been used before!
And, so he carried on, and eventually - using a thesaurus ? - he came upon renege!
Yes, that hasn't been used before. Great!
However, as I said earlier, it sounds contrived and artificial!