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Posted By: johncharles
09-Sep-13 - 08:37 AM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
Who exactly, said "clarity is very important".
The suggested revision, " But that was up until we found the box" seems rather clunky to me.
Maybe the original writer should be consulted for his opinion on this.