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Thread #152141   Message #3557284
Posted By: Nigel Parsons
08-Sep-13 - 08:29 PM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
Tunesmith - PM
Date: 07 Sep 13 - 04:50 PM
The opening of the box was the life-changing moment!
Between, getting up - on the day they found the box - and going to bed, on that same day, they, their father/husband, became a different person!
Yes, up until they found the box, they thought they knew the man.
That is the drama! That is the suddenness. That is the shock of the new!

Sorry, Tunesmith; Just saying "Disagree!" cuts no ice. You started this thread requesting opinions. From the original lyrics it is quite clear that finding 'the box' is not the cause of changed perceptions. It is only the viewing of the (listed) contents which allow the singer to revisit their view of their father.

Anyway, in your quote which I just gave you say that "the opening of the box was the life-changing moment". Your re-wording of the song makes the finding of the box the life changer!