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Thread #152141   Message #3557262
Posted By: Joe_F
08-Sep-13 - 05:50 PM
Thread Name: Improving Lyrics?
Subject: RE: Improving Lyrics?
I am glad to see at last that, in agreement with its subject line, this thread is about more than one song.

I have no hesitation in emending Tom Paxton's "I Am Changing My Name to Chrysler", a song that deserves to survive, but on which he spent a little too little time. "What the dollar used to get us/Now won't buy a head of lettuce" is incoherent; it ought to be "What a day's work used to get us...". And "I will tell my power broker" would be funnier than "I will tell some power broker". (Of course I have one -- doesn't everybody?)