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Thread #82010   Message #2508350
Posted By: Musket
05-Dec-08 - 03:19 AM
Thread Name: worst rhyme ever
Subject: RE: worst rhyme ever
Number 6 said:

I cringe at the line ...

"Down the lane I walk with my sweet Mary, hair of gold and lips like cherry."

What's wrong with that rhyme?

Now you might not like the line as a matter writing style, but it sounds like a perfect rhyme to me.

Dave Oesterreich

Yeah Dave BUT

It makes a better rhyme as follows;

"Down the road I walk with my sweet Mary,
Teeth all black and her legs all hairy"

Mind you, try that in a karaoke and they turn the microphone off. (Ingoldmells, Coral Club Summer 1995)