Mudcat Café message #1683074 The Mudcat Café TM
Thread #89274   Message #1683074
Posted By: Jeri
02-Mar-06 - 07:00 AM
Thread Name: Wincers
Subject: RE: Wincers
Alba, yes!
There's a Dave Carter song with the line "...but his rebel heart lay bleeding on his knees." Now, I'm sure he MEANT that to inspire people to think "What the...?" - but it's still messy.

I wrote, "The notes can fall on withered hearts and bring them back to life again." The target of that song didn't really take note of that, but I wanted to change it. I just didn't/don't know what TO. This from somebody who was singing "Ain't no gra-a-a-a-ave gonna hold my body down," and walking around with my arms outsretched a la zombie. (I think it needs a chorus line of them.)